Essay #13 - Sexism

FINAL DRAFT

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/27/10

Sexism:

Separation of The Sexes

TS Its not a big deal now to be friends with someone who has the opposite gender as you. CS The
 public social life has matured in that way.

TS There was a great deal of sexism back when To Kill A Mockingbird takes place. SD Scout hangs out with boys, always with their adventurous ideas, their daydreams that confuse the elder citizens, only bringing joyful fun when they come near (loose sentence). CM Scout enjoys their satisfying and thrilling adventures, but the grownups will think it is a shameful thing of Scout to play with boys.  CM You couldn't have much of a variety of friends back then.  SD The women seem unsatisfied with the men's presence: "Ladies seemed to live in faint horror of men, seemed unwilling to approve wholeheartedly of them. But I liked them. There was something about them,-"(Lee, 313). CM Why must all of the ladies be expected to be stuck up and extremely sensitive? CM The men always seem to think we are soft and useless but we are helpful and smarter in ways they are not. CS Sexism continues to make people uneasy if it is right or wrong for a girl and a boy to be friends.

TS Natural sexism occurs in our lives without even trying. SD Naturally we become friends first with our same gender. CM We are known as more feminine, sometimes classified as "sissies", but we eventually become friends with a boy (periodic sentence). CM It is not looked down upon as often because it happens more often everday as girls and boys make friends around the world build. SD If you come into lunch at school you will see that most of the boys are sitting together and most of the girls are sitting together. CM Without doing it on purpose it just happens. CM Is it in our genes? CS Sexism does not occur as often today, you don't have to worry about what type of gender you are friends with.

TS Sexism has been forgotten by the generation of today. CS It's not something that will be repeated as much in the future.

Self-Assessment

1. One writing issue I am continuing to work on:

Using unnecessary words in my sentence.

2. One strong point I see in this piece of writing:

I really enjoy my periodic and loose sentence.

3. One possible weak point I see:

There may be a lack of unity.

4. The grade I would give myself:

I would probably give myself a B+.

Assessment Journal - Visit #7

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/16/10

Visit #7

TS I have talked many times about comfortability and I believe I am very comfortable at the Boys and Girls Club of America.  SD When I came to the Claude Chester School it was snack time for the kids.  CM I sat near a group of a girls and they reminded me of when I was littler and we would have a "buffet" of our snacks and all share.  CM This is exactly what these girls did, which made me smile of the thought of the old days.  SD I had a chance to help a little boy named Ajia on his math homework.  CM I felt comfortable with helping Ajia with Math because I actually knew what to do.  CM It wasn't just something that I was learning now.  SD THe whole thought of being comfortable with these children was setting in.  CM I was now able to not feel bad about telling another kid that they should quiet down or focus on their homework.  CM I think in the earlier visits I thought that it would be too mean to tell a kid to do that.  CS Now that I am fully comfortable, I can come in with confidence and interact with the kids.

Essay #12

FINAL DRAFT

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/21/10

Theres Always A Beginning:

Do We Appreciate Its Results?

TS We create things with our imagination, we dream our daydreams, and think our normal thoughts. CM Under every imagination and daydream or regular thought there is a hidden meaning. CM You can always start at the beginning of the thought and at the end you will maybe understand its complicated meaning. CS Nobody thinks deep enough to figure out the meaning of things.

TS Imagination is what creates new moments and inventions. SD A quote that follows the line of imagination: "Somewhere along when the Finches were in Egypt one of 'em must have learned a hieroglyphic or two and he taught his boy" (Lee, page 303). CM I realized, I have always been very imaginative, thinking sometimes of very creative things. CM When I was younger, I would think of creative stories with my friends and we would play them. SD Relating to the book, Dill has always been creative. CM Dill is always the one who thinks of the games they would play when the children were younger. CM He has the nerve to say in an inspired way: " Well I'm gonna be a new kind of clown. I'm gonna stand in the middle of the ring and laugh at the folks" (Lee, page 290). SD Dill and I are alike, we are both very innovative and creative. CM When our creativity reaches out they are a daydream, thinking of the possible photography shots I could do on my spare time, being creative (S-V split). CM When we get a new art assignment I'm always unsure of myself what I could do creatively. That's my imagination kicking in. CS Imagination controls every living being of this planet. It makes us think of everything that could improve people's lives.

TS We have learned so much from looking at the beginning of things. CM It always makes us appreciate the simple things in life that we have access to. CM We all must realize how fortunate we are to have all these things. CS The people who don't appreciate should really stop what they are doing and think about what they have in life.

1. What part of writing took the most time?

I think it took awhile to try and find the quote I would base this essay off.

2. What is the most significant between the first draft and this final version?

I realized in my first draft I didn't have much unity with my topic my quote was linked to, so I fixed it so it mentioned the topic in every chunk.

3. What do you think is the best part of your paper?

I really enjoy my participle S-V split, it is quite peaceful I believe.

4. What part of this paper could be still improved?

Maybe I might need to fix the punctuation in some areas.

Assessment Journal - Visit #6

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/15/10

Visit #6

TS Today was the first time I visited the Claude Chester School on a Friday. SD I walked into the Music Room where Power Hour was held and I sat there because today everyone was a less hyper. CM Maybe, the benefit from coming on a Friday is that they are more calm. CM Shantice was reading a story about Rosa Parks to a group of kids because Martin Luther King Day was coming up. SD A little later after free time we had a discussion about the segregation, racism, Jim Crow Laws and etc. CM A little girl wanted to write some of the words up on the board so I helped her. CM After I told her how to spell it she practiced it again later on. SD After Power Hour there was a choice to play board games or rock-papers-shoot. CM I decided to go with the kids who wanted to play board games. CM A little boy, Ajia, and I played air hockey with a checkers chip. CM Shantice then asked if anyone wanted to play Scrabble and Ajia he really wanted to play that instead. I never really saw a kid so excited about Scrabble before which sort of intrigued me because it is sort of an educational game. CS I learned that on maybe one of the most quiet days at Boys and Girls Club can be one of the more interesting days.

Assessment Journal - Visit #5

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/14/10

Visit #5

TS Arriving back to the Boys and Girls Club of America was exciting. SD They always remember you and they want to have a lot of friends. CM A little girl, Rocel, she remembered me from the day before and asked me to sit next to her. CM She got really excited and was talking to me a lot although I had to remind her to keep on reading so she didn't distract anybody else. SD I enjoyed Power Hour, when the kids did their homework. CM It felt good that I could actually help someone out with homework that was a lot easier than the homework we do now in school. CM Some of the kids get too distracted and start wiggling in their chairs because they know that free time is in a few minutes. SD The more and more the kids speak out they loose minutes off their free time. CM I am lucky enough I don't have to tell them that. CM Mr. Bob was trying to tell the kids about making the right moves in friendship and they kept on speaking out without raising their hands which made them loose a lot of minutes. CS This visit made me remember when I was younger and I got in trouble with my friends for goofing off and not sitting still because we wanted to play.

Assessment Journal - Visit #4

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/13/10

Visit #4

TS Every visit I seem to have a few butterflies in my stomach. SD Although, I have become more relaxed as the more visits I do. CM The more comfortable I have enjoyed my time more helping kids. CM The key is to be comfortable as possible, to make sure they can have fun and not get into too much trouble. SD Being a young girl you would cling to almost every counselor or teacher in every class you were in. CM They all look up to the older kids, for example almost all of the little girls asked me to write their names in cursive. CM Of course I accepted, because I wanted to be accepted to their friendship. SD The little girls had their kitty fights and wanted my opinion on what to do about their problem. CM I tried to make it basic make sure both of their answers were equal. CM I enjoyed helping them. CS I brought home with me more experience.

Essay #11 - Mystery

2ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/13/10

Mystery:

What Lies Beneath the Surface

TS Mysterious thoughts happen lead to mysterious events.  SD No one looks at the facts of who it could of been caused by.  CM Thinking nothing more of it we carry on with our lives.  CM If only we could use our brains and think more of the intriguing happening.  CS We know that we should never nose our way to far into other peoples business. 

TS Mystery rages on beneath different characters with different personalities in To Kill A Mockingbird. SD When you think of the Radleys, you think they are harmless because you don't really know who they are. CM However, mystery eats away the surface after you hear the stories of Boo Radley stabbing his father in the leg with his scissors. CM Everyone stays away from the Radleys; there is always something abnormal about them. CS Nobody wants to cause any trouble while trying to interact with the Radleys because they are too mysterious.

TS Mystery seems to make curiosity bloom in the eyes of children. SD Once Atticus finds out that the kids are at the court watching his case unravel, he seems too tired to be furious. CM Atticus reconsiders them staying to see the verdict since they have been there all day. CM He is intrigued by the mystery that fills their eyes because they want to be educated in such a mysterious way. CS He wants them to be well educated, doesn't want them to be hidden from the strange and dangerous world.

TS Am I mysterious? SD Thinking about that question it makes me think how outgoing I am. CM I sometimes think of myself as very random. CM When I am random, you are always wondering what I am going to do next. SD I seem very spontaneous throughout my life's choices. For example, following along with my dad to South Africa. CM Everyone really wondered why I was going they thought that there laid a hidden reason for this trip. CM All it was, was vacation; we all need a break from school every once in awhile. SD When I arrived in South Africa I was perplexed in what this trip might unfold. CM Bringing me good fortune or bad luck? CM I learned some of the culture and the arts and how they made their money of it . SD I didn't know what to expect. CM Should I have expected vandalism everywhere I turn? No. CM I find out this is filled with the smell of the good old fashioned "home" feel to it. CS Traveling around the world is a joy to try new and mysterious foods and styles of living. Its all about trying new things being experienced with the cultures of the world. I enjoy traveling across the globe, but I never really will know where I will be brought to next. I will have to wait for the mystery to unfold itself.

TS The longer you know someone or the longer you read a book and learn more about the character then you can unfold what lies beneath them.  SD Throughout life you will learn that when you unravel the binding of a mysterious person you can learn many things.  CM You can learn their personality and realize they are a perfectly normal person.  CM Nothing is really as mysterious as you thought it was.  CS You go on learning more about different people that have a mystery to solve but can really be normal just like you.

Assessment Journal- Visit #3

Cassy

Mr. Salsich

English 8

1/7/10

Visit #3

TS I realized that my shyness is wearing off every time after the previous visits I did. SD I arrive to the Claude Chester School to find that Maya is not there that day. CM This seemed to be a problem for me. CM This was a problem because she made me tend to not be as shy and now she was not here and I would have to make do. SD For the first time I tried bonding with a fifth grader which was slightly shy about. CM Her name was Silvia she was a very spunky. CM The way I made it not as awkward is I asked her what she got for Christmas. SD It was soon Power Hour where the kids have to read and do their homework. CM There was a couple people who always seemed to be getting in trouble, Tiffany and Russel. CM I tried telling Russel that he needed to work on homework but he would start and get immediately. CS Even though I was a little shy this time I realized some of the other people who volunteer there find it slightly easier because they might have siblings so it is easier with bonding but I thought I did a good job in being someone they would like.