2ND DRAFT FOR GRADING
Cassy
English 8
Mr. Salsich
November 18, 2009
Feeling Unwanted:
The Effects That It Has On Us
TS You try to say something funny, only the result is rejection. CM Your stomach turns the feeling of being unwanted as found a new home in you. CM Is there any possible way to get rid of it without the painfulness of embarrassment? CS Feeling unwanted is a very simple feeling, but it comes with complicated results.
TS The feeling of being unwanted can hurt the self esteem of a human being. SD Dill feels that he is unwanted and decides to come back. CM The feeling of being unwanted, which usually results in depression and feeling like you are nothing but a grain of dust in the world (adjective clause). CM Before Dill decided to come back to Maycomb, he believed that his parents would spend a lot of time together, love each other together, and he never forgot when he first came and they treated him like an angel (complex sentence). SD Dill has not had a family for awhile, when he starts living with his parents they don't always play with him. CM He feels the loneliness overcoming him and he suddenly feels unwanted. CM His lack of exposure to families he seems to think that when something goes wrong its always his fault: " ' The thing is, what I'm tryin' to say is-they do get on a lot better without me, I can't help them any.' " SD It is sad to see Dill thinking there is something wrong with him and his family never wants to be with him. CM Dill doesn't know that little snags that make him feel unwanted when trying to bond with his family happen to every child in a family. CM Dill is trying to make an lovable impression on his parents but all his results end in feeling discarded. CS Once the unwanted dust floats away will it join others and bond with them?
TS Feeling useless to the world, going through the same routines of "I'm ugly", "nobody likes me", which is a feeling that most girls my age go through (adjective clause). SD When it comes to inside jokes that you do not understand it makes you feel insecure. CM Because you try and fit in, you get distracted and forget about your true friends and you worry about being noticed (complex sentence). CM All you want is just to be apart of one inside joke to make you feel like you are not lonely. SD Then us girls go through this phase change, where we end up thinking very negative of ourselves causing our self esteem to go way down. CM Negativity thrives off of the feeling of being unwanted. CM We think that nobody likes us because of our looks and we end up complaining to our friends or mothers. SD Our self esteem seems to lower when we look at beauty magazines. CM When we look at the women with pounds of makeup it makes us feel ugly and discarded. CM When we come to our senses we realize that they all have helpers that do their hair and makeup everyday. CS Once we feel left out, unwanted we tend to break down until we come to our senses.
TS Nobody ever seems to be fully satisfied with their personality, looks, and self esteem. CM They feel that they don't belong in any group of friends that nobody loves them. CM They overreact about the situation and believe that nobody likes them even though somebody does. CS When we come to our senses everything is peaceful.
