Favorite Sentences

1.

5/17/10

This I Believe:

My Beliefs of Summertime

CM We all share the enchantment that casts us into this spell of friendship.


I chose this sentence becuase I thought this sentence sounded like it came from a fairytale. 

2.

5/6/10

The Ugly and the Beauty:

Beauty Lies in Everything

CM My eye would only know where these certain gems of beauty would lie.


I chose this sentence because I thought that this sentence had the meaning of "rare" because gems are rare and some people know where certain ones are.

3.

5/1/10


Friendships: The Everlasting Fondness That Completes Everything

Through the summer,

‘O the days we lay beside each other tanning on the beach in the heat of the sun.

I chose this sentence because people don't usually have a sentence that says " 'O " because it seems so old fashioned.

4.

1/13/10

Mystery:

What Lies Beneath the Surface

TS Mysterious thoughts happen lead to mysterious events.

I chose this sentence because I liked how I repeated mystery two times to give the reader the idea that the subject is mystery.

5.

4/8/10

Music:

A New Perspective on a Love Story

1. Music is a thing of beauty that accompanies everyone differently.

I enjoy this sentence because when you read the word "accompanies" it made me think of a duet and music being the person's partner in life.

6.

3/10/10

Forgiveness: There Is Only so Much Forgiveness a Person Can Give Out

TS Some people can't change who they are, they can't change their looks, they can't change their personality, and they can't change their actions (tricolon).

This is one of my favorite sentences because the special affect of a tricolon really did leave a small piece of gold in this piece of writing.

7.

4/27/10

Family: 

A Complicated Puzzle

TS Love lies in the light air that never consists of loneliness (alliteration).

I chose this sentence because it was a nice alliteration and some alliterations can be overdone but I believe this is perfect.

8.

3/4/10

The Gentlemen and Ladies of Maycomb:

Manners Taken Too Seriously

CM The people of Maycomb recognize her for her etiquette behavior: "Aunt Alexandra was one of the last of her kind: she had river-boat, boarding-school manners-"(Lee, page 172).

I chose this sentence because I thought it was a good use of a quote and also I thought the word etiquette was a good choice of a thesaurus word.

9.

2/25/10

Forgotten

I want, you want, we want, everybody wants to be remembered by their unique characteristics.

I chose this sentence because this is a good use of purposeful repetition and i thought it was meaningful line.

10.


12/4/09


Irony:
The Little Impurities of Life


CM This incongruity happens to some of our main highlights of our lives.


I chose this sentence because it was from one of my earlier essays and really shows how well my writing has developed.

Essay #23 - Last Essay

2^ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salsich

5/17/10

This I Believe:

My Beliefs of Summertime

1. As the weeks of school are finishing up, it dawns on us that summertime is soon here! 2. We can return to basking on the beach, trying new things, and meeting new people (purposeful repetition).  3. Our summertime carefree attitude kicks in and we have used every single hour of the day.  4. I believe in the summertime feeling.

TS I believe in the warm air we breath in, air full of the laughter and joy we share during the summer.  SD I believe in the freedom of summer.  In the summer you are free, free of school, free of tests and quizzes, and free of the projects that keep you up at night (purposeful repetition).  CM All ropes that bind us to work or school can be cut loose with our delight.  CM Everyone watches the spirit of summer disappearing as school approaches again and we become disappointed.  SD I believe in the pleasure I swallowed when I knew the new summer would be filled with new friends and life.  CM It is impossible to live without summer.  CM Summertime is the perfect season for new friendships.  SD I believe that summertime has the magic lingering in the air only for you to help yourself get through the next school year.  CM This magic helps you get through all the drama which ends with bliss when everyone forgives each other.  CM We all share the enchantment that casts us into this spell of friendship.  CS We can capture and save any bit of laughter from the summertime and carry it out through our lives to make our sad days happy.

1. O’ but summer must come to an end at some point. 2. Our “serious scholar” attitude must return to help us get through the new school year that will be filled with new things.  3.  Every little quiz or test that we get through will be one more little step to the warmth of summer.  4. My belief of summertime lets in light through windows of the school that whispers to strive harder for my grades and I push to the end of the school year.

Self Assessment

1.      One writing issue I am still continuing to work on:

I believe I am having trouble to achieve to make a variety of sentence lengths in my essay.

2. One strong point I see in this writing:

            I believe my body paragraph was very powerful.  I thought I made some points about summertime not most people would think to write about if they were to choose summertime that they believed in.

3.  One possible weak point I see in this writing:

            People might not be able to understand some of the writing because of how deeply I have thought about it.

4.  The grade I would give myself:

            I think I would give myself an B+ because I thought this writing was well thought out.  I also think that it was a lot stronger than any of my essays.  I feel like I thought a lot more carefully about this essay, especially that it is my last essay and I want it to be my best essay of the year.

Essay #22

2nd DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salsich

5/6/10

The Ugly and the Beauty:

Beauty Lies in Everything

1. People are judged everyday by their looks.  2.  Once judged they are usually labeled pretty or ugly.  3. Why can’t someone be judged by the way they are in the inside? 4.  It is not wrong to see the beauty in a person’s personality.

TS Do you define someone or something as ugly by their looks? SD The author tells you, “nothing is ugly just because the world [says] so” makes a statement that you shouldn’t follow people who think something is unsightly when you might think it is stunning (apt. thesaurus word).  CM The author is trying to get the message to us to not be so judgmental of people who are unattractive.  CM If you don’t get the time to get to know them you will not be able to find their possible inner beauty.  SD The man in the poem has the right idea to turn something beautiful, “so, he reinvented them as valentines and they became beautiful.”  CM The idea that we have the creativity to reinvent something maybe revolting into something beautiful is imposing (apt. thesaurus word).  CM We have strengths to see no unsightliness in the world, but most of us choose to find all of it.  CS Finding ugly in someone beautiful is unsightly.  Finding beauty in someone, who is possibly not attractive on the outside, is magical, is inspiring, and is the happiness you give others (purposeful repetition). 

TS In my younger childhood I seemed to think everything was beautiful in its own way.  SD Back then, when I was younger I always seemed to think the opposite of what others thought.  CM When somebody gave notion (apt. thesaurus word) something was ugly I thought that it was gorgeous.  CM I would usually turn up stones and observe them and, “-they became beautiful”.  SD My dad said I used to go through a phase where I brought pockets full of rocks attached to clumps of dirt.  CM I would cleanse the rocks until I could see the beauty in each individual crystal that was buried underneath chunks of dirt.  CM Everywhere I went I would find something that could be reinvented to something striking.  SD I felt special to be able to find beauty in something everywhere I turned.  CM My eye held the secret to inner beauty, the secret to finding the hiding spots, the secret to find beauty in everyday objects (purposeful repetition).  CM My eye would only know where these certain gems of beauty would lie.  CS Every stone in the world is a matchless (apt thesaurus word) magnificence that is waiting to be found.

The gift of finding beauty in the littlest of things is an artistic gift.  2. With this gift you seem to appreciate everything.  3. Nobody needs this gift if unless you can focus on any detail in the world you will find beauty in it.  4. There is never ugly in the world every beauty has a purpose.

Self Assessment

1.      One writing issue I am still continuing to work on:

I am still trying to make it possible to have my essay completely polished.

2.   One strong point I see in this writing:

            I thought my opening and closing paragraphs were very strong.

3.   One possible weak point I see in this writing:

            I am not sure if I like the body paragraphs they might not be organized well.

4.    The grade I would give myself:

                        I believe I would give myself a B for this essay.

Essay #21 - Friendship

2^nd DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salsich

5/1/10

Friendships: The Everlasting Fondness That Completes Everything

Dear Reader:

This is an essay that reminds you of how much your friends mean to you.  There will be four genres describing the laughs that are always there and the worries that are never there.  This essay will consist of an expository paragraph, a free verse, a haiku, and an interview.  I hope you find what friendship really is in this essay.

                                                                                                                 Sincerely,

Cassy

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Friendship

Friendship is a bond where you are accepted for who you are.

No judgments,

No hate,

No jealousy,

‘Tis love that no one can break.

Friends cannot be separated,

Text,

Phone call,

E-mail,

That is how we keep in touch when we are not exactly next to each other.

We have been through it all,

Since the beginning of our friendship we have told each other many secrets we were scared to share,

We vow not to tell anyone.

We get together every chance we can get.

We sit next to each other in class every chance we can get.

Eager smiles on our faces welcome the giggles that come out of our lips.

Giggles that risk the respect of the teacher in class,

Giggles that make our day only better,

Giggles that take in doubts we had on the possible boring day.

We risk it all.

Through the fall,

The silly costumes we put on for Halloween.

Through the winter,

Where the big group hugs keep us warm together.

Through the spring,

Where we can feel the joy of warm air we breathe in as we giggle about inside jokes.

Through the summer,

‘O the days we lay beside each other tanning on the beach in the heat of the sun.

These seasons are all similar in one way.

We have kept the friendship everlasting throughout the years.

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TS Romeo and Juliet is a love story, but often love begins with a friendship.  SD Benvolio, Romeo’s cousin, realizes that Romeo seems lost lately because, “blind is his love and best befits the dark” (Shakespeare, 69).  CM His love for Juliet faded any of his consciousness that his friends were still around him.  CM If Romeo opens his eyes a little wider there might be people who want to help him with his love problem.  SD Romeo met Juliet at her party and they barely knew each other but became fond of each other quickly.  CM The first few minutes of meeting each other they become friends. CM Because Romeo’s lips poured out gallons of compliments of her beauty, things changed to love.  CS Friendships are a new beginning, friendships can lead to love, and friendships can end with or without a happy ending.

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Friends heal everything,

They fill in the missing pieces,

They make us complete.

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Interview (Q&A): A Woman Who Makes Friends for a Living

This is a woman who makes friends for a living.  Is it wrong or right?

Q: What exactly is your job?

A: Well, people call me with a problem with a loved one who seems lonely.  I help them find new friends to make their social life easier.

Q: Do you think that is cheating the experience away by setting them up with people they would enjoy to hang out with?

A: Yes and no.  The journey to meet new friends makes the experience worthwhile when you find friends on your own.  If you notice that someone you know is having trouble coping with his or her social life it is okay to call out for help.  Everyone needs a little push sometimes to get to things they want, such as a friendship.

Q: Thank you for letting us interview with you about your unique job.

A: Always a pleasure.  Remember that if you need the little extra push to get a friendship call me.

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 Self Assessment

1. One writing issue I am continuing to work on:

One writing issue that I still continue to work on is finding all my mistakes.  I do believe over this school year that I have almost fixed this problem.

2. One strong point I see in this writing:

I thought my Q&A was very creative and different.  I also am really proud of my long free verse poem.

3. One possible weak point I see in this writing:

I am afraid that some people might be a little confused on the Q&A.

4. The grade I would give myself:

I think I would give my self a B+ on this essay because I though my free verse was especially excellent.  I also thought that my expository paragraph made a lot more sense than some of my past expository paragraphs.

Essay #20 - Family

2^ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salisch

4/27/10

Family: A Complicated Puzzle

1.  A family should never consist of anger.  2. Anger does sometimes seep through small cracks that are in the household.  3. To be a family we forgive each other for our mistakes.  4. Forgiveness is in all of the hearts we seek in our families.

TS Love lies in the light air that never consists of loneliness (alliteration). SD Even though my parents are divorced I am proud that they still keep in contact with each other. CM I think the situation would become much more hectic (apt. thesaurus word) if they didn’t cooperate. CM Instead we all work together to get all of my clothes and toiletries to bring to and from the houses. SD Helping, caring, thoughtful, and always busy, my parents fit this choice of words perfectly (parallelism with participles). CM Sometimes I do not understand how they have the time to be so attentive while they have work to think about. CM Seeing what they have to do as grownups is impressive and I can see it takes a lot of consideration to have to get this far in life. SD Even though sometimes my parents and I do not get along we usually forgive each other, which I think is very polite. CM I think forgiveness is a big part of being in a family you have to learn to forgive each other in an unselfish way. CM If we didn’t forgive each other in my family I am sure that none of us would be a happy and courteous family that we are today. CS My parents are there to give me tips, to help me with something if I am having trouble, to be the guidance of my cautious life choices.

 TS If my family is a kindred, that means in the future they will let me make my life choices as an adult. SD I do not know where I will be in the future, but my brood will have to approve of it since it is what I want. CM If my parents really love me they will let me make my decisions, "and, but thou love me, let the find me here"(Shakespeare, 75).  CM The parents of Romeo and Juliet would never approve of such a thing as marriage between their two hateful families.  CM Every parent should be happy if their child is happy where they are in life. SD Hate does exist in the world, an unpleasant feeling, this painful word should not exist, and it does not exist in my family (loose sentence). CM Hate in blood should not exist against other families: "'tis but thy name that is my enemy" (Shakespeare, 71).  CM Hate does not seem like it can ever separate Romeo and Juliet from their love. CM I am glad that hate is never used against each other in my house.  CM I believe I would be a very different person if hatred subsisted (apt. thesaurus word) in my household.  CS My family lifestyle does not consist of hatred, sadness

1. In Romeo and Juliet the lovebirds have learned to deal with both the families’ hatred.  2. It is good to have people in your family that follow their heart no matter what happens.  3. These people can help keep some families sturdy enough to get by little problems. 4. Forgiveness in our lives inside and outside our household is a healthy thing.

Self Assessment:

1. I still am having trouble with finding my mistakes.
2. I thought both of my special effects were well thought out.
3. Throughout this essay I believe that some parts are not clear to me.
4. I believe I would give myself a B-, I do not believe this was quite as good as my past essays.

Poem From the Heart

Dissecting Love

What is love?

Is it a small peck on the cheek?

Or is it just the bond within your family?

Love is the hugs you give your dog.

Love is the smile you pass to your friends

Receiving that smile can always tape a great mood on you.

Love is when you comfort a friend when losing a loved one,

Love is the blush on a girl's face that is caused by a compliment,

The blush is as red as raspberries.

Love is not the rejection of trying to strike up a conversation.

Love is carried in our arms like school books

Love is passed on like a highly contagious virus passed on between handshakes.

It is impossible to live without love,

It is the wind under our wings.

Essay #19 - Music

2^ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English

Mr. Salsich

4/8/10

Music: A New Perspective on a Love Story

1. Music is a thing of beauty that accompanies everyone differently. 2. Music can help people with their problems, help people with their self esteem, and help people figure out who they really are (tricolon). 3. Music describes stories like Romeo and Juliet to normal people like us. 4. It adds an upbeat mood to our daily lives.

TS In this paragraph these three songs by the All American Rejects are helpful to me- a unique band, they help me find who I really am (appositive). I have always savored (apt. thesaurus word) the lyrics and sounds that are produced by this wonderful band. SD In my life I have always relied on my friends to cheer me up if I was down. CM These lyrics from “Paper Heart”: “the leaves fall down, and so do I into the arms of a friend” show how I am socially in my life. CM Everything this band writes is raw just like me, what you see is what you get; I won't change my hobbies or personality for anyone. SD The lyrics in “Too Far Gone” really speak to me too: “wishful thinking, patience shrinking, bliss is far away, North is callin’, now I’m fallin’, at your feet”. CM This song reminds me that we all have “wishful thinking” about our dreams and we have to be patient to work towards the bliss that is far away. CM I appreciate this song because it makes me remember that I have many years of life left and I have a lot of time to work towards my dreams. SD Another favorite song, “Move Along” has hopeful lyrics, which I really enjoy; “another day when you’ve had your fill of sinking, with the life held in your hands are shaking cold”. CM Sometimes I just have to realize that I don’t need to wait anymore I can just start taking all the opportunities that cross me to achieve my dreams. CM I also relish this song because the whole theme of this song is about moving along in life and not holding a grudge and keeping things to yourself that bring you down. CS I will always be grateful for their music on Earth. The All American Rejects will either always get me through my problems or keep me in a good mood.

TS The situation of Romeo and Juliet is expressed in the song “Another Heart Calls” by the All American Rejects. SD In Romeo and Juliet their age is quite different from the age when we fall in love today. CM One line from the lyrics in this song fits the situation perfectly: “we were just two kids that took the moment when it was there.” CM The maturity (apt. thesaurus word) of these kids is very young for them to know when they are in love. SD Romeo and Juliet realize that this situation is very serious. CM There families express much distaste for each other- hate, only a blooming love like this can possibly fix it (appositive). CM Romeo and Juliet know this is no summer love, “I’ll never ask for anyone but you”. CS “Another Heart Calls” shows how the two lovebirds, “-remember when we stole the night”.

1. Life can only progress with music in our lives. 2. We learn new cultures of peace and love that we never knew existed. 3. The mystifying story of Romeo and Juliet is being deciphered through the modern language in the songs of today. 4. Music is a new perspective of how the people see the world today.

Self Assessment

1. One writing issue I am continuing to work on: I still think I still miss a few careless mistakes, that is why I try to read over my work very carefully.
2. One strong point I see in this piece of writing: I was especially proud of the special effects and I was also proud of how I related the songs very well (I thought) to Romeo and Juliet.
3. One possible weak point I see: I am not sure, but some of my punctuation might be a little incorrect.
4. The grade I would give myself: I believe I deserve a B+ because I thought I very nicely tied the song lyrics and the story of Romeo and Juliet.

Essay #18- Forgiveness

Cassy
Mr. Salsich
English 8

3/10/10

Forgiveness: There Is Only so Much Forgiveness A Person Can Give Out

1. To forgive and forget the simple mistakes that people have done is easy. 2. To forgive and forget the largest and most powerful mistakes is a very complicated thing to do. 3. We can forgive ourselves for our small mistakes. 4. Although, we must not hold in our mistakes until we burst.

TS Some people can't change who they are, they can't change their looks, they can't change their personality, and they can't change their actions (tricolon). SD Because of Bob Ewell having such a lack of manners it passed onto his daughter. CM As a child, Mr. Ewell could have had the same situation of non-supportive parents. CM If that is the reason, it might be easier for Mayella to forgive her father. SD If I was Mayella I don't think I would ever be able to forgive my father for beating me. CM Mr. Ewell needs to learn how to control his drinking so he does not beat her. CM Mr. Ewell can't use the excuse of being drunk every time when he beats her. SD If they had such a thing as rehab I would, as his daughter, send him there. CM Mayella is a very weak girl who can't cope with her father's strength when he is beating her. CM She can't possibly forgive her father the way he betrayed (apt thesaurus word) her. CS If Mayella's lifestyle was different she probably wouldn't be like her father and betray Tom Robinson.

TS There are some people can never be forgiven. SD Hitler is one of those people who will never be forgiven, never forgotten for his horrible actions, never forgotten for the amount of evil he has done to the world, never forgotten by the people he hurt (tricolon). CM You usually want to be remembered by something good you did to help out in the world. CM Hitler thought he did something good, but it was completely immoral to the world. SD Hitler believed that Jews, homosexuals, physically handicapped, and mentally challenged people needed to be exterminated. CM Hitler killed about 11-14 million people while not understanding that they were just like him except they had different beliefs. CM Hitler should never be forgiven because he killed a fraction of the world's population. SD Would it be different if Hitler had not done this horrific (apt thesaurus word) thing to the people of our world? CM It would be like he never broke up millions of families and killed millions of people. CM We can't undo all of the gas camps that killed all different races of people. SD He has left a permanent scar on the planet that will never be forgotten or forgiven. CM To forgive your friend for a small mistake she made is nothing. CM To forgive and try to forget Hitler is impossible. CM Millions of children died with or without their parents. CM The children will never be able to grow up and get married and have their own families. CS It's not possible to ever forgive and forget Hitler for all of the lives he ruined and killed.

1. Because of the outraging things Hitler has done we cannot control our anger towards him. 2. He enjoyed seeing fear in the eyes of the people he was destroying. 3. Was it possible that he was neglected? 4. Neglect should never lead up to this level of cruelty to the citizens of this planet that we all have to share.