Essay #22

2nd DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salsich

5/6/10

The Ugly and the Beauty:

Beauty Lies in Everything

1. People are judged everyday by their looks.  2.  Once judged they are usually labeled pretty or ugly.  3. Why can’t someone be judged by the way they are in the inside? 4.  It is not wrong to see the beauty in a person’s personality.

TS Do you define someone or something as ugly by their looks? SD The author tells you, “nothing is ugly just because the world [says] so” makes a statement that you shouldn’t follow people who think something is unsightly when you might think it is stunning (apt. thesaurus word).  CM The author is trying to get the message to us to not be so judgmental of people who are unattractive.  CM If you don’t get the time to get to know them you will not be able to find their possible inner beauty.  SD The man in the poem has the right idea to turn something beautiful, “so, he reinvented them as valentines and they became beautiful.”  CM The idea that we have the creativity to reinvent something maybe revolting into something beautiful is imposing (apt. thesaurus word).  CM We have strengths to see no unsightliness in the world, but most of us choose to find all of it.  CS Finding ugly in someone beautiful is unsightly.  Finding beauty in someone, who is possibly not attractive on the outside, is magical, is inspiring, and is the happiness you give others (purposeful repetition). 

TS In my younger childhood I seemed to think everything was beautiful in its own way.  SD Back then, when I was younger I always seemed to think the opposite of what others thought.  CM When somebody gave notion (apt. thesaurus word) something was ugly I thought that it was gorgeous.  CM I would usually turn up stones and observe them and, “-they became beautiful”.  SD My dad said I used to go through a phase where I brought pockets full of rocks attached to clumps of dirt.  CM I would cleanse the rocks until I could see the beauty in each individual crystal that was buried underneath chunks of dirt.  CM Everywhere I went I would find something that could be reinvented to something striking.  SD I felt special to be able to find beauty in something everywhere I turned.  CM My eye held the secret to inner beauty, the secret to finding the hiding spots, the secret to find beauty in everyday objects (purposeful repetition).  CM My eye would only know where these certain gems of beauty would lie.  CS Every stone in the world is a matchless (apt thesaurus word) magnificence that is waiting to be found.

The gift of finding beauty in the littlest of things is an artistic gift.  2. With this gift you seem to appreciate everything.  3. Nobody needs this gift if unless you can focus on any detail in the world you will find beauty in it.  4. There is never ugly in the world every beauty has a purpose.

Self Assessment

1.      One writing issue I am still continuing to work on:

I am still trying to make it possible to have my essay completely polished.

2.   One strong point I see in this writing:

            I thought my opening and closing paragraphs were very strong.

3.   One possible weak point I see in this writing:

            I am not sure if I like the body paragraphs they might not be organized well.

4.    The grade I would give myself:

                        I believe I would give myself a B for this essay.