Essay #23 - Last Essay

2^ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salsich

5/17/10

This I Believe:

My Beliefs of Summertime

1. As the weeks of school are finishing up, it dawns on us that summertime is soon here! 2. We can return to basking on the beach, trying new things, and meeting new people (purposeful repetition).  3. Our summertime carefree attitude kicks in and we have used every single hour of the day.  4. I believe in the summertime feeling.

TS I believe in the warm air we breath in, air full of the laughter and joy we share during the summer.  SD I believe in the freedom of summer.  In the summer you are free, free of school, free of tests and quizzes, and free of the projects that keep you up at night (purposeful repetition).  CM All ropes that bind us to work or school can be cut loose with our delight.  CM Everyone watches the spirit of summer disappearing as school approaches again and we become disappointed.  SD I believe in the pleasure I swallowed when I knew the new summer would be filled with new friends and life.  CM It is impossible to live without summer.  CM Summertime is the perfect season for new friendships.  SD I believe that summertime has the magic lingering in the air only for you to help yourself get through the next school year.  CM This magic helps you get through all the drama which ends with bliss when everyone forgives each other.  CM We all share the enchantment that casts us into this spell of friendship.  CS We can capture and save any bit of laughter from the summertime and carry it out through our lives to make our sad days happy.

1. O’ but summer must come to an end at some point. 2. Our “serious scholar” attitude must return to help us get through the new school year that will be filled with new things.  3.  Every little quiz or test that we get through will be one more little step to the warmth of summer.  4. My belief of summertime lets in light through windows of the school that whispers to strive harder for my grades and I push to the end of the school year.

Self Assessment

1.      One writing issue I am still continuing to work on:

I believe I am having trouble to achieve to make a variety of sentence lengths in my essay.

2. One strong point I see in this writing:

            I believe my body paragraph was very powerful.  I thought I made some points about summertime not most people would think to write about if they were to choose summertime that they believed in.

3.  One possible weak point I see in this writing:

            People might not be able to understand some of the writing because of how deeply I have thought about it.

4.  The grade I would give myself:

            I think I would give myself an B+ because I thought this writing was well thought out.  I also think that it was a lot stronger than any of my essays.  I feel like I thought a lot more carefully about this essay, especially that it is my last essay and I want it to be my best essay of the year.