Essay #19 - Music

2^ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English

Mr. Salsich

4/8/10

Music: A New Perspective on a Love Story

1. Music is a thing of beauty that accompanies everyone differently. 2. Music can help people with their problems, help people with their self esteem, and help people figure out who they really are (tricolon). 3. Music describes stories like Romeo and Juliet to normal people like us. 4. It adds an upbeat mood to our daily lives.

TS In this paragraph these three songs by the All American Rejects are helpful to me- a unique band, they help me find who I really am (appositive). I have always savored (apt. thesaurus word) the lyrics and sounds that are produced by this wonderful band. SD In my life I have always relied on my friends to cheer me up if I was down. CM These lyrics from “Paper Heart”: “the leaves fall down, and so do I into the arms of a friend” show how I am socially in my life. CM Everything this band writes is raw just like me, what you see is what you get; I won't change my hobbies or personality for anyone. SD The lyrics in “Too Far Gone” really speak to me too: “wishful thinking, patience shrinking, bliss is far away, North is callin’, now I’m fallin’, at your feet”. CM This song reminds me that we all have “wishful thinking” about our dreams and we have to be patient to work towards the bliss that is far away. CM I appreciate this song because it makes me remember that I have many years of life left and I have a lot of time to work towards my dreams. SD Another favorite song, “Move Along” has hopeful lyrics, which I really enjoy; “another day when you’ve had your fill of sinking, with the life held in your hands are shaking cold”. CM Sometimes I just have to realize that I don’t need to wait anymore I can just start taking all the opportunities that cross me to achieve my dreams. CM I also relish this song because the whole theme of this song is about moving along in life and not holding a grudge and keeping things to yourself that bring you down. CS I will always be grateful for their music on Earth. The All American Rejects will either always get me through my problems or keep me in a good mood.

TS The situation of Romeo and Juliet is expressed in the song “Another Heart Calls” by the All American Rejects. SD In Romeo and Juliet their age is quite different from the age when we fall in love today. CM One line from the lyrics in this song fits the situation perfectly: “we were just two kids that took the moment when it was there.” CM The maturity (apt. thesaurus word) of these kids is very young for them to know when they are in love. SD Romeo and Juliet realize that this situation is very serious. CM There families express much distaste for each other- hate, only a blooming love like this can possibly fix it (appositive). CM Romeo and Juliet know this is no summer love, “I’ll never ask for anyone but you”. CS “Another Heart Calls” shows how the two lovebirds, “-remember when we stole the night”.

1. Life can only progress with music in our lives. 2. We learn new cultures of peace and love that we never knew existed. 3. The mystifying story of Romeo and Juliet is being deciphered through the modern language in the songs of today. 4. Music is a new perspective of how the people see the world today.

Self Assessment

1. One writing issue I am continuing to work on: I still think I still miss a few careless mistakes, that is why I try to read over my work very carefully.
2. One strong point I see in this piece of writing: I was especially proud of the special effects and I was also proud of how I related the songs very well (I thought) to Romeo and Juliet.
3. One possible weak point I see: I am not sure, but some of my punctuation might be a little incorrect.
4. The grade I would give myself: I believe I deserve a B+ because I thought I very nicely tied the song lyrics and the story of Romeo and Juliet.