Favorite Sentences

1.

5/17/10

This I Believe:

My Beliefs of Summertime

CM We all share the enchantment that casts us into this spell of friendship.


I chose this sentence becuase I thought this sentence sounded like it came from a fairytale. 

2.

5/6/10

The Ugly and the Beauty:

Beauty Lies in Everything

CM My eye would only know where these certain gems of beauty would lie.


I chose this sentence because I thought that this sentence had the meaning of "rare" because gems are rare and some people know where certain ones are.

3.

5/1/10


Friendships: The Everlasting Fondness That Completes Everything

Through the summer,

‘O the days we lay beside each other tanning on the beach in the heat of the sun.

I chose this sentence because people don't usually have a sentence that says " 'O " because it seems so old fashioned.

4.

1/13/10

Mystery:

What Lies Beneath the Surface

TS Mysterious thoughts happen lead to mysterious events.

I chose this sentence because I liked how I repeated mystery two times to give the reader the idea that the subject is mystery.

5.

4/8/10

Music:

A New Perspective on a Love Story

1. Music is a thing of beauty that accompanies everyone differently.

I enjoy this sentence because when you read the word "accompanies" it made me think of a duet and music being the person's partner in life.

6.

3/10/10

Forgiveness: There Is Only so Much Forgiveness a Person Can Give Out

TS Some people can't change who they are, they can't change their looks, they can't change their personality, and they can't change their actions (tricolon).

This is one of my favorite sentences because the special affect of a tricolon really did leave a small piece of gold in this piece of writing.

7.

4/27/10

Family: 

A Complicated Puzzle

TS Love lies in the light air that never consists of loneliness (alliteration).

I chose this sentence because it was a nice alliteration and some alliterations can be overdone but I believe this is perfect.

8.

3/4/10

The Gentlemen and Ladies of Maycomb:

Manners Taken Too Seriously

CM The people of Maycomb recognize her for her etiquette behavior: "Aunt Alexandra was one of the last of her kind: she had river-boat, boarding-school manners-"(Lee, page 172).

I chose this sentence because I thought it was a good use of a quote and also I thought the word etiquette was a good choice of a thesaurus word.

9.

2/25/10

Forgotten

I want, you want, we want, everybody wants to be remembered by their unique characteristics.

I chose this sentence because this is a good use of purposeful repetition and i thought it was meaningful line.

10.


12/4/09


Irony:
The Little Impurities of Life


CM This incongruity happens to some of our main highlights of our lives.


I chose this sentence because it was from one of my earlier essays and really shows how well my writing has developed.

Essay #23 - Last Essay

2^ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salsich

5/17/10

This I Believe:

My Beliefs of Summertime

1. As the weeks of school are finishing up, it dawns on us that summertime is soon here! 2. We can return to basking on the beach, trying new things, and meeting new people (purposeful repetition).  3. Our summertime carefree attitude kicks in and we have used every single hour of the day.  4. I believe in the summertime feeling.

TS I believe in the warm air we breath in, air full of the laughter and joy we share during the summer.  SD I believe in the freedom of summer.  In the summer you are free, free of school, free of tests and quizzes, and free of the projects that keep you up at night (purposeful repetition).  CM All ropes that bind us to work or school can be cut loose with our delight.  CM Everyone watches the spirit of summer disappearing as school approaches again and we become disappointed.  SD I believe in the pleasure I swallowed when I knew the new summer would be filled with new friends and life.  CM It is impossible to live without summer.  CM Summertime is the perfect season for new friendships.  SD I believe that summertime has the magic lingering in the air only for you to help yourself get through the next school year.  CM This magic helps you get through all the drama which ends with bliss when everyone forgives each other.  CM We all share the enchantment that casts us into this spell of friendship.  CS We can capture and save any bit of laughter from the summertime and carry it out through our lives to make our sad days happy.

1. O’ but summer must come to an end at some point. 2. Our “serious scholar” attitude must return to help us get through the new school year that will be filled with new things.  3.  Every little quiz or test that we get through will be one more little step to the warmth of summer.  4. My belief of summertime lets in light through windows of the school that whispers to strive harder for my grades and I push to the end of the school year.

Self Assessment

1.      One writing issue I am still continuing to work on:

I believe I am having trouble to achieve to make a variety of sentence lengths in my essay.

2. One strong point I see in this writing:

            I believe my body paragraph was very powerful.  I thought I made some points about summertime not most people would think to write about if they were to choose summertime that they believed in.

3.  One possible weak point I see in this writing:

            People might not be able to understand some of the writing because of how deeply I have thought about it.

4.  The grade I would give myself:

            I think I would give myself an B+ because I thought this writing was well thought out.  I also think that it was a lot stronger than any of my essays.  I feel like I thought a lot more carefully about this essay, especially that it is my last essay and I want it to be my best essay of the year.

Essay #22

2nd DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salsich

5/6/10

The Ugly and the Beauty:

Beauty Lies in Everything

1. People are judged everyday by their looks.  2.  Once judged they are usually labeled pretty or ugly.  3. Why can’t someone be judged by the way they are in the inside? 4.  It is not wrong to see the beauty in a person’s personality.

TS Do you define someone or something as ugly by their looks? SD The author tells you, “nothing is ugly just because the world [says] so” makes a statement that you shouldn’t follow people who think something is unsightly when you might think it is stunning (apt. thesaurus word).  CM The author is trying to get the message to us to not be so judgmental of people who are unattractive.  CM If you don’t get the time to get to know them you will not be able to find their possible inner beauty.  SD The man in the poem has the right idea to turn something beautiful, “so, he reinvented them as valentines and they became beautiful.”  CM The idea that we have the creativity to reinvent something maybe revolting into something beautiful is imposing (apt. thesaurus word).  CM We have strengths to see no unsightliness in the world, but most of us choose to find all of it.  CS Finding ugly in someone beautiful is unsightly.  Finding beauty in someone, who is possibly not attractive on the outside, is magical, is inspiring, and is the happiness you give others (purposeful repetition). 

TS In my younger childhood I seemed to think everything was beautiful in its own way.  SD Back then, when I was younger I always seemed to think the opposite of what others thought.  CM When somebody gave notion (apt. thesaurus word) something was ugly I thought that it was gorgeous.  CM I would usually turn up stones and observe them and, “-they became beautiful”.  SD My dad said I used to go through a phase where I brought pockets full of rocks attached to clumps of dirt.  CM I would cleanse the rocks until I could see the beauty in each individual crystal that was buried underneath chunks of dirt.  CM Everywhere I went I would find something that could be reinvented to something striking.  SD I felt special to be able to find beauty in something everywhere I turned.  CM My eye held the secret to inner beauty, the secret to finding the hiding spots, the secret to find beauty in everyday objects (purposeful repetition).  CM My eye would only know where these certain gems of beauty would lie.  CS Every stone in the world is a matchless (apt thesaurus word) magnificence that is waiting to be found.

The gift of finding beauty in the littlest of things is an artistic gift.  2. With this gift you seem to appreciate everything.  3. Nobody needs this gift if unless you can focus on any detail in the world you will find beauty in it.  4. There is never ugly in the world every beauty has a purpose.

Self Assessment

1.      One writing issue I am still continuing to work on:

I am still trying to make it possible to have my essay completely polished.

2.   One strong point I see in this writing:

            I thought my opening and closing paragraphs were very strong.

3.   One possible weak point I see in this writing:

            I am not sure if I like the body paragraphs they might not be organized well.

4.    The grade I would give myself:

                        I believe I would give myself a B for this essay.