Essay #20 - Family

2^ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy

English 8

Mr. Salisch

4/27/10

Family: A Complicated Puzzle

1.  A family should never consist of anger.  2. Anger does sometimes seep through small cracks that are in the household.  3. To be a family we forgive each other for our mistakes.  4. Forgiveness is in all of the hearts we seek in our families.

TS Love lies in the light air that never consists of loneliness (alliteration). SD Even though my parents are divorced I am proud that they still keep in contact with each other. CM I think the situation would become much more hectic (apt. thesaurus word) if they didn’t cooperate. CM Instead we all work together to get all of my clothes and toiletries to bring to and from the houses. SD Helping, caring, thoughtful, and always busy, my parents fit this choice of words perfectly (parallelism with participles). CM Sometimes I do not understand how they have the time to be so attentive while they have work to think about. CM Seeing what they have to do as grownups is impressive and I can see it takes a lot of consideration to have to get this far in life. SD Even though sometimes my parents and I do not get along we usually forgive each other, which I think is very polite. CM I think forgiveness is a big part of being in a family you have to learn to forgive each other in an unselfish way. CM If we didn’t forgive each other in my family I am sure that none of us would be a happy and courteous family that we are today. CS My parents are there to give me tips, to help me with something if I am having trouble, to be the guidance of my cautious life choices.

 TS If my family is a kindred, that means in the future they will let me make my life choices as an adult. SD I do not know where I will be in the future, but my brood will have to approve of it since it is what I want. CM If my parents really love me they will let me make my decisions, "and, but thou love me, let the find me here"(Shakespeare, 75).  CM The parents of Romeo and Juliet would never approve of such a thing as marriage between their two hateful families.  CM Every parent should be happy if their child is happy where they are in life. SD Hate does exist in the world, an unpleasant feeling, this painful word should not exist, and it does not exist in my family (loose sentence). CM Hate in blood should not exist against other families: "'tis but thy name that is my enemy" (Shakespeare, 71).  CM Hate does not seem like it can ever separate Romeo and Juliet from their love. CM I am glad that hate is never used against each other in my house.  CM I believe I would be a very different person if hatred subsisted (apt. thesaurus word) in my household.  CS My family lifestyle does not consist of hatred, sadness

1. In Romeo and Juliet the lovebirds have learned to deal with both the families’ hatred.  2. It is good to have people in your family that follow their heart no matter what happens.  3. These people can help keep some families sturdy enough to get by little problems. 4. Forgiveness in our lives inside and outside our household is a healthy thing.

Self Assessment:

1. I still am having trouble with finding my mistakes.
2. I thought both of my special effects were well thought out.
3. Throughout this essay I believe that some parts are not clear to me.
4. I believe I would give myself a B-, I do not believe this was quite as good as my past essays.