Thursday, March 4, 2010

Essay #17- Ladies and Gentlemen

2ND DRAFT FOR GRADING

Cassy
English 8
Mr. Salsich
3/4/10

The Gentlemen and Ladies of Maycomb:
Manners Taken Too Seriously

1. The ladies of this time were supposed to know when to stay quiet or speak up. 2. Their opinions were not looked at or cared about much. 3. THey felt that they couldn't speak their mind. 4. They felt like a property and they wanted to be free.

TS Is everyone meant to be uptight, to be a gentleman, to be a fine lady (anaphora)? SD The ladies of Maycomb always seem very tense and like they have never relaxed before. CM The severity of their seriousness has taken a toll on their facial expressions: “two tight lines had appeared at the corners of her mouth” (Lee, page 312). CM Ms. Dubose looks like she has never enjoyed any of the surroundings of the people of Maycomb. SD Scout is becoming a lady too because her manners are starting to show in her actions. CM She is polite enough to invite someone not as fortunate over her house: “‘Soon’s school starts I’m gonna ask Walter home to dinner’” (Lee, page 299). CM Scout may not enjoy it but as the days and years ware on she has become more ladylike. SD The rules of a gentleman—tipping your hat to the ladies, complimenting everything about a woman, helping anyone close in need—which Tom Robinson accomplished (appositive S-V split). CM He gave the “lonely” Mayella company and treated her perfectly: “Tom Robinson was probably the only person who was ever descent to her” (Lee, page 257). CM Although, Tom Robinson thought he was doing a pleasant thing, he got in trouble for something that was made up just because he was a descent black man. CS Not everybody you expect is either uptight or completely free of the “chains” of manners that bind us all.

TS There are some true polite people of Maycomb while there are others who are not as polite. SD Aunt Alexandra is quite the perfect lady who everybody takes note of her manners. CM The people of Maycomb recognize her for her etiquette behavior: "Aunt Alexandra was one of the last of her kind: she had river-boat, boarding-school manners-"(Lee, page 172). CM She was an "incurable gossip", there was always something new to talk about her for. SD Aunt Alexandria really wants to change Scout's "tomboy" ways. CM The town usually knows what to expect of Scout's appearance: "-I was usually mud-splashed or covered with sand"(Lee, page 176). CM They need to give time to Scout so she can adapt to being ladylike. SD Jem seems like a good little boy until you hear the way he looks down to Scout and Dill. CM Jem pretends to be what he is not, he pretends that he is more mature, and much older than Scout and Dill, also to have more experience with different situations (30-word loose sentence). Jem, in an unequal way, thinks he is older than Scout enough to see things that young children should not see or experience: "'Scout, go home"(Lee, page 231). CS Sometimes you can never change anything about a person's lack or abundance of manners.

1. The men of Maycomb are always expected to be on their best behavior to the ladies. 2. They grow out of their "playing with mud" ages when they were younger. 3. Not every boy wants to be the perfect gentleman. 4. Ladies and gentlemen have their ups and downs on what they can do or not do.

SELF ASSESSMENT

1.One writing issue I am continueing to work on:
I find it hard to find all of my errors of grammar.

2.One strong point I see in this piece of writing:
I think it is good that I have a lot quotes in the essay.

3. One possible weak point I might see:
I am afraid that I missed some of my mistakes that I could of possibly made.

4. The grade I would give myself:
I would probably give myself a B-.

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